Separate Ways

‘So you think that listening to those bland records over again and drinking yourself into a stupor is a good way to live your life then, Danny? Because it certainly isn’t the life I want to join you in.’

‘Yeah I do think it’s a good way to live my life as it happens, Anna! I enjoy myself, alright?! All you ever seem to do is drift around me like I’m invisible, or nag me with that annoying voice of yours! Why do you think I turned to drink in the first place, eh?! Come on Anna, let’s face it, you don’t enjoy life, do you? You don’t sing or dance or have a laugh anymore! Seriously, what happened to the fun-loving Anna I knew back in the day? Where’d she go?’

‘The Anna you once knew disappeared a while back, Danny; when she realised that her husband would never change and would always choose drink over her. I think that’s enough to stop any woman from singing, dancing and having a laugh, don’t you think?!’

So why don’t you fuck off then, Anna, if I’m that bad?’

‘Oh, I am. I have a cab booked. I’m fucking off today.’

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6 thoughts on “Separate Ways

  1. The second paragraph seems a bit speechy, darling. You may have wanted to break this up into a bit more back and forth. I liked it overall, though.

  2. Um, it sounds like Danny has a drinking problem! It is terrible when a so called man chooses to drink over holding or laughing with his wife, woman, GF or whatever! Personally I think that the problem is within himself.

    • He definitely does have a drinking problem; a problem that he is either oblivious to or one that he knows exists but chooses to ignore. I wanted to keep it equal score between both characters; he is to blame for his actions and she is to blame for putting up with him through the years and not taking action for her own good. In the end and for the best, they can only but go their separate ways 🙂

  3. You definitely kept even score with this one and I most certainly love and applaud your last line. {Your brave honesty shines like a star!} If only Danny had understood that laughing, drinking, while holding a decent conversation accompanied by affectionately holding his better half could actually be okay with each other as opposed to (regularly) drinking to oblivious escape with abandon from any iota of relative responsibility for his own commitment, surely he would not have been left in a fucked off situation… 2nd paragraph totally proved the existence of the ‘problem’! Real strength in this piece – very nice work, ma’am 🙂

    • Thanks Charlene. I kind of wanted to get across that women who find themselves in these situations can escape if they find the strength and courage 🙂 I don’t usually use crude words in my work, but as I was writing it just sprang out of nowhere and so felt right 🙂 Thanks for your feedback on this – it’s always great to know what readers think 🙂

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